The pie charts below show the average household expenditures in Japan and Malaysia in the year 2010.

The pie charts below show the average household expenditures in Japan and Malaysia in the year 2010.
As an introduction, The pie charts illustrate the percentage of expenses on various household needs in two Asian countries, during the year 2010.
Overall
, it can be seen that the most expenditure in both countries was on food, housing and other goods and services,
while
the least was on healthcare.
To begin
with, in Japan, half of all money was spent on other goods and services and on transport at 29% and 21% respectively.
However
, in Malaysia
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60% was allocated on the same in 26% and 34%.
Furthermore
, the almost equal percentage was distributed for food and healthcare in both countries, which was around 25% and less than 10% respectively.
In contrast
,
although
Japan contributed 20% of the income to transport, half of that was allocated for the same purpose in Malaysia.
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  • household expenditures
  • proportion
  • cultural differences
  • economic differences
  • living standards
  • real estate market
  • public transportation
  • private transportation
  • infrastructure
  • government healthcare policies
  • quality of life
  • holistic view
  • inflation
  • economic growth
  • societal norms
  • globalization
  • communication expenses
  • education expenses
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