The pie charts below show the average household expenditures in Japan and Malaysia in the year 2010.

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As an introduction, The pie charts illustrate the percentage of expenses on various household needs in two Asian countries, during the year 2010.

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, it can be seen that the most expenditure in both countries was on food, housing and other goods and services,

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the least was on healthcare.

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with, in Japan, half of all money was spent on other goods and services and on transport at 29% and 21% respectively.

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, in Malaysia

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60% was allocated on the same in 26% and 34%.

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, the almost equal percentage was distributed for food and healthcare in both countries, which was around 25% and less than 10% respectively.

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Japan contributed 20% of the income to transport, half of that was allocated for the same purpose in Malaysia.

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household expenditures
proportion
cultural differences
economic differences
living standards
real estate market
public transportation
private transportation
infrastructure
government healthcare policies
quality of life
holistic view
inflation
economic growth
societal norms
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The pie charts below show the average household expenditures in Japan and Malaysia in the year 2010.

Students have difficulty concentrating in school. What are the reasons and solutions for this problem?

The increase in the production of consumer consumption goods results in damage to the natural environment. What are the causes of this and what can be done to solve this problem?

It is important to take risks, both in their professional lives and their personal lives. Do you think the advantages of taking risks outweigh the disadvantages?

Some say that the most important thing about being rich is that one has the opportunity to help others. To what extent do you agree or disagree