The table illustrates the proportion of monthly household income five European countries spend on food and drink, housing, clothing and entertainment

The table illustrates the proportion of monthly household income five European countries spend on food and drink, housing, clothing and entertainment
As an introduction, the table gives information on the percentage of expenditure on four different necessities, from their monthly income, in
France
,
Germany
, the
UK
,
Turkey
, and
Spain
.
Overall
, it can be seen that the highest proportion of money was allocated to food and drink and to housing,
whereas
the least was to clothing and entertainment, in all five countries.
To begin
with, more than 30% of the money was spent on housing in
France
,
Germany
and the
UK
,
while
in
Turkey
and
Spain
, the expenses on the same were less than 20%.
In contrast
,
Turkey
and
Spain
spent 36% and 31% respectively on food and drink,
while
France
,
Germany
and the
UK
allocated 25%, 22% and 27% respectively on the same necessities.
Furthermore
, each country allocated less than 20% of their monthly income to entertainment and clothing.
However
, the least expenditure was on clothing which was less than 10% in
France
and
Spain
, and 15% 11% and 12% in
Germany
, the
UK
and
Turkey
.
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