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The best way to solve the environment problem is to increase fuel prices. Agree or disagree

#environment #fuel #prices
As the expanse of technology overhauls each sphere of life, the dynamics of transportation have altered too. A group of society vehemently deems that government bodies should increase
price
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the price
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 of
disel
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diesel
 and
petrolium
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petroleum
 to ameliorate environmental
pollution
. I concur with
given
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 statement and it looks like a
positiove
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positive
 development, let us unfurl
this
 in upcoming paragraphs. Basically, there are a plethora of factors which evident that rise in the
fule
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fuel
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price
 can help to decrease
pollution
. First and
formost
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foremost
, when
price
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the price
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 of gasses will
increse
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increases
, people will
initate
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initiate
to use
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using
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 public transportation
instead
 of private. To explain, a rise in
price
 will
effect
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affect
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 the budget and savings of an individual, so using public vehicles is a secure and safe
menthod
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method
while
 travelling
as well as
 society will get
clean
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a clean
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 and less polluted environment
in
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result
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a result
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. To exemplify, a survey conducted by the United States Census Bureau in 2008 in California over a group of 2000 vehicle owners clearly revealed that mass transit is their solution to save their money
instead
 of paying huge
sum
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 to
fuel
 organisations. Moving
further
,
price
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a price
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 surge in power
source
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sources
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 means less consumption and less requirement of
production
. To clarify, when people
starts
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 using buses or trains
then
requirement
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the requirement
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of
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for
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 more
fuel
production
 will be reduced which will help to maintain
environmental
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the environmental
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 balance,
although
 using
vehicle
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the vehicle
a vehicle
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 is a cause of
pollution
,
production
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the production
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 of power sources is a cause too. To illustrate, Mr Benjamin Bradley, editor of The
Washinghton
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Washington
 Post in his editorial on
pollution
 clearly stated that as the
requiement
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requirement
requirements
 of
fuel
 is
incresed
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increased
which
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it
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 results
into
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in
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production
 speed up which leads to
combustion
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the combustion
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 of
fosil
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fossil
fules
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fuels
files
 and leads to environmental
pollution
.
To conclude
, it can be said that,
although
surge
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a surge
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 in
fuel
 rate is a starting step toward
reduction
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the reduction
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 of environmental
pollution
, there are several other solutions too to curb
this
 menace that cannot be ignored.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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