Online shopping has become increasingly popular. Why do people shop online? What are the environmental problems caused by this trend?

Nowadays, shopping moved from
in store
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to online. Is a fact that people prefer to buy
good
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goods
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,
such
as clothes, food, electronics and more, from home, easily checking on the computer what a store can offer them. In
this
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I will discuss the reasons why
this
happes
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happens
and the
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consequences
which
this
dangerous trend,
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believe, is provoking to our world.
Firstly
, I want to point out the reasons why people might prefer online
shoppping
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shopping
.
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conformed
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by a survey
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in Perth that 75
percent
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of Australians prefer to purchase from a
web site
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website
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rather than a
phisical
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physical
shop
.
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It is for sure a matter of time
,
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because not having to go to a shop will save a good part of the day, given that, you can
aquire
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acquire
just using your mobile
while
you are
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the public
transports
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transport
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or
while
been
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being
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confortably sitted
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comfortably sitting
on your couch at home.
Moreover
, with the advent of online shops and big
platforms
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you can find things that
otherwise
would not be available in your area. For these motivations online shopping is
prefferred
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preferred
. Is faster, easier and you can get parcels from
alll
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all
over the world.
However
, there are not just advantages of
this
trend, but it is causing serious problems to our
enviroment
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environment
. The consequences of the use of platforms
such
Amazon
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as Amazon
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or Ebay
,
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are
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ùn high use of packaging and
transports
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transport
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. Enfacts when just buy a little thing from the internet, it arrives
to
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at
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your place, covered first in plastic and
then
wrapped again to
do
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not get damaged and
then
again closed in a box. I truly believe that
this
is insane. the
amount
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of materials
as
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such as
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paper and plastic that we are wasting and all the effort required to produce them, as disboscaments and plastic production are slowly killing our
worls
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world
. And, if we consider that 35
percent
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of parcels
recieved
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received
, mostly
colthes
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clothes
in which we do not fit, are sent back, the number of
thise
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these
this
those
waste is almost doubled.
In addition
to
get
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all that stuff from far countries or even from shops next door, is needed a huge use of
transports
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transport
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and
this
keep
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encrasing
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increasing
the
pollutions
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pollution
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more and more. It would be better to walk to the shop or minimize
the
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apply
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online shopping for things that we really cannot get by ourselves.
IN
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this
essay
i
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put in evidence the reasons
of
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this
trend, but
i
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wanted
also
highlight the
much
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more bad effects
that
is
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causing to our environment. I believe that it should be regulated and limited to try to save what we can.
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