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Young people today mostly learn by reading books or watching movies, rather than real-life experiences. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Learning can be done by various means. The young generation of today's era learns mostly from reading books or watching movies, rather than real-life experiences. It is not an opinion but a fact that cannot be proven wrong.
Firstly
, our youth is very keen on things that spike their interests. Books and movies are one of them that becomes an important part of their life. These things might motivate them to do something or make them realise things about themselves.
Secondly
, it is human nature to adopt some characteristics of a character they like the most.
This
 character might not even be real. Take a small girl
for example
 who holds a tea party with her stuffed animals after watching snow white, or that small boy who wants to fly like Superman.
However
, when a child falls down a swing he will cry for sure but would most likely repeat his mistakes again.
Lastly
, a book has the capability of being a teacher and a friend,
while
 a movie is capable of making humans mentally attach to them. For
this
 very
reason
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 it is easy for a human to learn from a book or a film than it is from some real-life experience. In ,conclusion it can be said that humans take up a lot of information that they get to see or read.
However
, human is most likely to ignore stuff that happens in real life or that they might not be aware of.
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