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top priority of businesses is making money, and they do not need to have social responsibilities. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#priority #businesses #money #responsibilities
Most of the business is concentrating on making profits and they do not have to take any public responsibilities.
This
 essay will disagree with the given statement. One of my primary reason related to disagreeing with the given reason is that when companies tend to maximize their profits, they will probably construct more branches by wiping out some forests for places. The consequence of
this
 action could lead to a sequence of disastrous events
such
 as more solidified floods, parched lands and erosion of soil.
Furthermore
, when enterprises decide to ascend the number of factories, they could run a higher risk of solidifying climate change. To be more specific, smoke from industrial facilities was contaminated by carbon dioxide which possesses enough heat to destroy the Ozon's surface. Another considerable cause of
this
 concept is that waste from factories almost bumps directly into the sea, lakes and Greeks which could eliminate marine habitats and increase the rate of water-borne diseases infection. Not only water-borne diseases, but civilians will
also
 probably experience a higher risk of contracting air-borne diseases of the enormous amount of smoke surrounding our planet. Some hypotheses that were given are that humanity could witness the galaxy in the sky at night but the smoke from both living and especially from industrial activities constituted a glaze of vapour and chemical impurities. Taking everything into account, making money without taking note of social responsibilities will form a paradox with moral standards. With the list of negative sides for lacking of social responsibility, enterprises must take it seriously to conserve our life and our planet.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • profit maximization
  • economic development
  • Corporate Social Responsibility (CSR)
  • shareholders
  • moral obligation
  • reputation
  • customer loyalty
  • sustainable business models
  • accountability
  • ethical practices
  • regulations
  • consumer expectations
  • economic sustainability
  • stakeholders
  • social impact
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