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The chart and table below give information about tourists at a particular holiday resort in Australia. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart and table below give information about tourists at a particular holiday resort in Australia. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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These pie
chart
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 and
table
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look at the
amount
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 of tourists visiting Australia and their activities and
accomodation
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accommodation
 during the
holyday
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holiday
. The chart shows the
precentage
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percentage
 of
trevelers
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travellers
 from different countries,
whereas
 the table reveals the most
prefered
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preferred
 way of spending
the
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time in Australia. The given information
illustrate
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illustrates
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 that Australia is more popular among tourists from Asia and Europe, their quantity is roughly equal and in
summ
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summer
sum
 is more than 70% of all visitors. At the same time, these two categories have different views on
the
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spending time,
for example
, Asians
stays
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stay
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 at
the
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5-star hotels,
whereas
Europians
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Europeans
 prefer to sleep in a caravan or go camping.
Also
, there is a great difference in
number
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a number
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 of days, it is 7 and 16 days respectively. The presented data
indicates
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 that almost
two tenth
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 part of the tourists are from the US,
while
 the number of
visitours
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visitors
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 from other countries is half as many. Americans more often
stays
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stay
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 in
a hotels
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a hotel
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 like Asians, but they prefer more long vacations like
Europians
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Europeans
.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "whereas".
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stays" was used 2 times.
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