Some people think that the education system should only focus on preparing students for employment, while others believe it has other important functions. Discuss both side and then give your opinion

There is no denying the fact that most
jobs
require experience or
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from universities before
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any contract.
While
it is a commonly held belief that individuals are thinking to prepare students for employment in schools and colleges. There is
also
an argument that
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opposes
oppose
it.
This
essay will analyse
this
topic from both points of view, and express my opinion.
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with
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system in childhood must be general for all sciences in
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way, to make the child find his habit, so
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of the
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life he should not
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himself for
work
.
In other words
, if the child studied all his sections in general, eventually his degrees will
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, which means it help him to find what he
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prefers
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addition, all people should be ready to
work
in university age.
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, before any adult
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graduate should
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free
work
hours for industries in his section. On
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hand, if the student
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Math or science or
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related to
this
we should not require
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him free
work
hours. It is
also
possible to say that it did not need to skills before
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involve
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in
jobs
, most employees
work
in offices or accounting.
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,
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manual
jobs
should include practice before
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to make people can solve problems or issues.
For instance
,
jobs
like engineering or physical fitness. In conclusion, despite people having different
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, I believe the student should attend many places for experiences to be ready for the
work
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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