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Write a letter to the Planning Manager of your local council about a historical building in your area that is about to be pulled down due to the lack of money to repair it. In your letter State why the building is important What the building can be used for in the future Suggest ways for paying for the repairs

#manager #council #area #lack #money #repair #future #repairs
Mr Planning Manager I am writing to you because I consider that
pulled
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 down a Monumento Guemes in Salta is a huge mistake. The build was built with the
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 of make aware
about
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values
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 that it
represent
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.
While
 Background in Salta is
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 pillar
about
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 our cultures and beliefs.  The building can be used
for
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motivate
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 new generations to be
as
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a
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ours
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 idols ,
,
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additionally
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 children could be disappointed to see how their idols are destroyed
to
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 the local council.
Moreover
, the
historial
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historical
buldings
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buildings
 in Sata are part of the culture in the city and
also
it
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plays a
rol
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role
 essential
in
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the
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tourist
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. Collections are having good outcomes in other locations in the country, we could make one for all states. Mercado Pago collections are being a boom in Argentina for raise and they have a perfect solution for us.
Thus
, I am sure that we will get sufficient money for the repairs. Faithfully, Francisco Gonzalez
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