Write about the following topic: The average standard of people's health is likely to be lower in the future than it is now. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for our answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Heath is the most important thing to having a great life.

However

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, most

people

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this

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generation

doesn't

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don't

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care about

there heath

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their health

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body. I totally

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agree with

this

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statement that in the present

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people

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people's

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health will decline. I would like to discuss

few

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a few

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reasons in the following paragraphs.

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, most

people

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are eating four or up to six

meal

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meals

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a day without

stoping

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stopping

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. And, we noticed the total fat average rates are increasing.

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, my friend Mike his

favorite

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favourite

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meals are

burger

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burgers

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and pizza.

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apply

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I am watching TV with my friend Mike he just ordered five chicken burgers with two Cola drinks. I got shocked when I saw what he just ordered.

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, I told my friend Mike to stop eating fast foods because

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thats

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that

that's

might

effect

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affect

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his health and body.

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, the other reason those humans

that

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apply

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stay

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bed for a long time with their own phones or playing video games and without going outside home to

breath

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breathe

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fresh air and get vitamin D

form

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from

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the sun.

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, my small brother loves to play video games 24 hours

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stop

instead

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going

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of going

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see

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the environment.

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, with

this

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generation

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,generation

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the health average will be lower in the future.

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, we must know how to balance the meals we eat

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every

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day

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and move away the junk food that

contain

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contains

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a lot of fats.

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people

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must avoid the

the

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apply

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cellphones or video games because

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it's

type

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a type

the type

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of addiction that may

effect

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affect

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the

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apply

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children or adults.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 8.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

251 words

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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

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