The maps illustrate the changes in the Local Museum at the north-east corner of Hartford Street and Redcliff Street in three separate years: 1957, 1987, 2007.

The maps illustrate the changes in the Local Museum at the north-east corner of Hartford Street and Redcliff Street in three separate years: 1957, 1987, 2007.
The maps illustrate the changes in the Local
Museum
at the
north-east
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corner of Hartford Street and Redcliff Street in three separate years: 1957, 1987,
2007
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and 2007
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. It's clear from the first map that the Local
Museum
was divided into three compartments, with the public reading
room
representing more than
a
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half of the
museum
building, leaving the rest of the space to the hall and the kitchen. The garden in 1957 had the most vegetation,
while
the number of trees declined in 1987.
Moreover
, in 1987, the public reading
room
was replaced by the meeting
room
. The hall
also
expanded, taking up where used to be the kitchen. As is seen from the third map, 2007 saw an expansion of the
museum
building along Hartford Street. The
theater
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,
instead
of the meeting
room
, accounted for around 3/4 of the whole building,
whereas
the hall remained unchanged. The garden outside the building was converted into a parking area. In summary, the maps illustrate noticeable
changed
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happened
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that happened
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to the Local
Museum
in Huddersfield between 1957 and 2007. Both the indoor and outdoor parts of the
museum
has
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have
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changed dramatically.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 3 times.

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  • infrastructure
  • interactive displays
  • virtual tours
  • environmental sustainability
  • community engagement
  • strategic partnerships
  • inclusive exhibitions
  • accessibility
  • branding and marketing strategies
  • evolution
  • maintain relevance
  • appeal
  • differently-abled visitors
  • cultural institutions
  • educational organizations
  • joint exhibits
  • exchange programs
  • green spaces
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