the map a below shows the ground floor of a particular art gallery in 2005. plan b shows the same area in the present day. summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
,The two given maps illustrate the changing of
art
Correct article usage
the art
gallery
ground floor from 2005 to the present.
Overall
, the area
facilities have been completed by more sophisticated technology, in particular
vending machine and lift. In addition
, entrance
hall emerged in the middle of Correct article usage
the entrance
ground
floor near to receptionist.
Upon the observation of the maps, the three Add an article
the ground
exhibition
rooms remained
exist and a lift was constructed near Add the particle
toremained
to
Change preposition
apply
exhibition
room
3. Receptionist
Correct article usage
The receptionist
area
relocated
from the corner Add a missing verb
was relocated
area
to the center
of Change the spelling
centre
area
which Add an article
the area
Add a missing verb
is near
near
to entrance hall. In Change the verb form
nears
additon
, today's art Correct your spelling
addition
gallery
Fix the agreement mistake
galleries
also
provide disable
Wrong verb form
disabled
facilitiy
Correct your spelling
facility
facilities
such
as wheel chair
ramp.
Shifting to another side of Correct your spelling
wheelchair
map
, in 2005, there was Add an article
the map
a
Change the article
an
exhibition
room
4 on the left side of entrance
. Add an article
the entrance
However
, today, the room
has been tranformed
into 2 new Correct your spelling
transformed
room
namely Fix the agreement mistake
rooms
temporary
Correct article usage
the temporary
exhibition
and children's
Correct article usage
the children's
area
. Moreover
, Gallery
office and Cafe Correct article usage
the Gallery
also
disappeared to make way for building the gallery
shop with vending
machine in front of it.Add an article
a vending
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words gallery, area, exhibition, room with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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