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Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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It is considered that
music
 can be a connecting bridge between
people
 of all nationalities and ages. Personally, I completely agree with
this
 opinion for several reasons. First of all, there are scientific
evidences
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evidence
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 that
music
bring
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people
 happiness. To be specific,
people
 might forget about some difficulties in life for a
while
 via listening to
music
. The main reason for
this
 is that they relax
while
 listening to
music
 and hormones of happiness, called
endorphines
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endorphins
, are produced, as well. These factors help
people
 to socialise well with each other if they have the same taste, not considering nationality or age. Individuals of different cultures and ages might have similar
taste
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tastes
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 in
music
.
Therefore
, they can relax and dance, listening to
music
, together.
Furthermore
,
people
 can demonstrate their cultural identity via
music
. What I mean is that they can share some national
songs
 with
people
 of
another nationalities
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another nationality
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.
For instance
, the programme, named Eurovision allows
people
 from Europe
illustrate
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to illustrate
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 their culture with
songs
 on TV screens.
This
 programme is extremely popular
,
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 so
that
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millions of
people
 around the world gather in order to
listen
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songs
 of all the
peoples
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people
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.
Moreover
,
music
 is able to bring
people
 of different ages together.
For example
, nowadays, old
songs
 are becoming favourable among youngsters because their parents and grandparents listen to these
songs
.
Likewise
,
young
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the young
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 generation can acquaintance older
one
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ones
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 with modern
music
. In
this
way
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music
 might be a connection between generations. In conclusion,
power
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the power
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 of
music
 is invaluable.
Hence
, I totally agree that
people
 can be brought together by
music
 whether they are of the same nation and age or not.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • universal language
  • evoke
  • connect
  • diverse audiences
  • cultural exchange
  • generational gaps
  • shared experiences
  • unifying force
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