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Men and women are capable of doing all jobs equally well. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#men #women #jobs
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In the past,
females
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 rarely used to
work
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in contrast
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 to males.
However
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, today it is considered that
women
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 have all the abilities to pursue any career. I strongly agree with
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 statement
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 essay will discuss
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 including my opinion. Some people surmise
women
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 can not take part in strenuous jobs that require long duty hours or demand mental exercise
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 their tender nature and the responsibilities they hold at home.
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, some still have conservative thinking and consider it ominous for
females
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 to imitate males in regard to
work
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.
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, many young and bright girls are forbidden to continue their studies
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 parents are not willing to let them earn in view of their gender. I highly condemn
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 culture and restrained approach.
On the other hand
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, some are in constant favour of
girl's
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 education
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, they value ingenious
females
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 considering that, they have proven themselves in diverse fields of
work
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 making their mark on the road to success. To exemplify, research conducted by Britain University disclosed the number of
females
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 who were capable of excelling in all jobs as equally as men. I opine that if they are given a chance they can perform better than their counterparts.
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,
women
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 have never been given an opportunity to prove their aptitude earlier but today they are stepping foot in all kinds of jobs including IT, medicine,banking,salesperson,pilot and whatnot.
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,
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 clearly depicts their skills and ability to perform at the same rate as Men. I reckon
women
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 should be given chances to encounter more challenging situations so that everybody can appreciate their
work
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • gender equality
  • professional abilities
  • personal skills
  • qualifications
  • success stories
  • stereotypes
  • perceptions
  • education and training
  • gender differences
  • social benefits
  • economic benefits
  • gender-diverse workplaces
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