The graph below shows the percentages of people in four age groups who had been to the cinema more than once a month, in the period between 2000 and 2011.

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The given line chart illustrates the differences in percentages of people who went to the cinema 2 times or more in a month based on different age groups from 7 to over 35

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old in a period of 11

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since 2000.

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, 7 to 14-year-old children had the almost highest proportion of people who had been to the movie house more than once a month

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citizens over 35

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old reported the lowest percentage in the given term. As can be seen, the percentage of children who watched a movie in the movie house more than once fluctuated wildly between 38% and 42% in the provided

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, 30% of the 7-14 group went to the movies more than once in 2000, whose percentages had moderate fluctuations reporting about 45% in the final year.

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the numbers for the third group were not stable during the term, the first and

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showed almost the same proportion (20%). It is

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noteworthy to mention that under %5 of men and women more than 35

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old attend a cinema throughout the given period.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words years with synonyms.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
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Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

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3 paragraphs

187 words

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The graph below shows the percentages of people in four age groups who had been to the cinema more than once a month, in the period between 2000 and 2011.

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