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Some people say that advertising encourages us to buy things that we really do not need. Others say that advertisements tell us about new products that may improve our lives. Which viewpoint do you agree with? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 254 words.

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A fair amount of
people
 think that advertising and media lure
people
 to purchase undesired
products
.
While
 other counterparts of society believe
advertisements
 let
people
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familiarize
 with the new trend of the
market
.
This
 essay shall discuss both sides of the issue. I,
however
, side with the latter view. On the one hand, many individuals think that few
products
 are advertised in
such
 a way that creates unnecessary demand. To put it another way,
advertisements
 sometimes create
need
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 in the mind of
people
 and provoke them to buy a
product
. For
an
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instance,
lately
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 I was looking for an
ethinic
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ethnic
 outfit online. I selected one of the articles and when I proceeded to pay, a window popped up showing the jewellery that would go with the outfit. I got enthralled with the designs and
ulitmately
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ultimately
 purchased it. Though, it was not required at all.
On the other hand
, advertisement is a significant tool to
market
 a
product
.
Moreover
, It is vital for a company to create awareness about the
product
 in the
market
 to increase its sale. The main question is, how would
people
 get to know about the new
products
 and technology if a company doesn't advertise it? To illustrate, a recent survey has been conducted by
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 that 80% of
people
 get to know about the
product
 through television
advertisements
 and billboards.
Therefore
, it can be ascertained that
advertisements
 keep us
awared
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aware
 and informed about
latest
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products
 in the
market
.
To sum up
,
advertisements
 of
products
 would remain a highly controversial topic with viewpoints both in favour and against. In my opinion, advertisement helps us to
to
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know new
products
 in the
market
 that might ameliorate our lives
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • encourage
  • persuade
  • manipulative
  • unnecessary
  • excessive
  • artificial needs
  • desires
  • consumers
  • oversaturation
  • impulse buying
  • financial problems
  • inform
  • educate
  • features
  • benefits
  • innovations
  • raise awareness
  • social issues
  • positive behavior
  • enrich
  • well-being
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