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You have an extended family and every year you all get together to go on a family trip for a week. Your uncle is in charge of the plans this year and you would like to suggest a place you have visited lately. Write a letter to your uncle. In your letter: suggest the place you recommend describe your experience in this place mention what you could do there

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Dear Jagrut uncle, I hope you are well and enjoying
your
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 retirement phase of your life .Recently,
while
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 talking to Amit, the other day, I got to know you have willingly volunteered to plan and organize our yearly family vacation. I have written
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 letter in regards
for
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 the same to let you know of one
such
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place
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 which I shortlisted for our planned vacation that you can consider. Considering we are planning for
monsoon
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 excursion and
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 keeping in mind the weather and number of family members accompanying us, I thought
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time
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 we can visit the Coorg aka "The Scotland of India". The reason why I choose
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 destination is , first of all, the
place
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 is relatively closer to our
place
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 and will eventually reduce the travel
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 and
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 we can enjoy the most of leisure
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.
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 . the
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 has
lot
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 of coffee plantations which we can visit
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 exploring dense forest and scenic beauty.
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, the best
time
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 to visit
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place
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 is around monsoons and
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 it would work in our favour too. And
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,
last
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 year when I visited
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place
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along with
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 my friends. my experience was surreal and
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 wanted our family
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 to feel the same experience . Regards, Xian
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I really want to study but I’m too tired.

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