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The maps show about the transformation of Felixstone city fro 1967 to 2001.

The maps show about the transformation of Felixstone city fro 1967 to 2001.
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The masterplans represent the changes that have been made for Felixstone
city
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 over a
5 year
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 period from 1967 to 2001. The net area of the city has remained the same over the
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5-year
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 period. Since 1967,
Golf
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the Golf
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 course has been retained to its original size and shape. Three units have been added in 2001 on the lefthand side of the High
street
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 and the opposite side of the street has been converted from 5 shops in 1967 to 8 residential units in 2001. Farmland has been redesigned and built into a Swimming pool with two Tennis
courst
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courts
court
course
 with a Hotel. Natural landscapes like dunes have been maintained to
its
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 original condition and
aforesttation
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aforestation
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 has inclined over the
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 period. Renewable energy systems have been introduced
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 the trees and the dunes for more sustainable landscapes facing the winds coming in from the sea. A
carpark
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car park
 has been added to the hotel and
cafe
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the cafe
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 is been in the same place
evrsince
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since
 1997. The marina has been converted into a public beach. The fish market has been demolished and changed into a private beach.
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