The most important decision that young people have to follow is what career to choose. do you agree or disagree?

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Most of us make countless
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in our lives, some of which we are grateful for, and some we regret making. Especially, our
career
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path decision which lays out an outline for our future.
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brings the belief that the most important for teenagers and young adults is their
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path. In
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essay, I'll go over why I disagree with the belief and think all
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are equally important. Chosen
career
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paths are highly flexible. Choosing a major in college or a company to work for seems like a big deal until we realize that we could switch majors and companies later on. Many
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student
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transfer majors after their
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year in college, ending up studying what they truly enjoy. Most of us fear that, once we have chosen an option there's no going back.
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isn't true since we all have the option to transfer and explore a new profession.
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, there is no need to worry about picking the correct
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path at an early age.
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, we should be cautious about making our daily
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. Choosing the wrong option multiple times would have an impact on your future.
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, a
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decides to go to their
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party
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and
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returns to their normal routine, and another
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also
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goes to their
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party
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and decides to return the day after, gets hooked, and goes to the
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every other day. The
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student
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wouldn't be impacted much by the
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,
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the ladder would undergo a personality shift from a
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to a
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-goer and most likely an alcoholic. By the end of the year, the
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might graduate with great academics,
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the
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-goer might not even graduate.
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shows the impact of several bad
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turned into a bad habit. All in all, we should focus on reducing choosing bad options. In conclusion,
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picking a
career
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has a major impact on our lives, we'll always have a choice to quit or switch.
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, we should emphasize teaching the younger generation how to
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better choices, creating a habit that will stick with them and benefit them more in the long run.
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