Student should spend time working before begining their University studies.To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Most
of
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people
think that student shall spend
time
working before starting their
University
education.The
writter
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writers
disagree
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with
this
statement and will
demonstate
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demonstrate
the
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opinion about it. On the one hand,students after finishing their high school graduate
they
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will go to their
University
studies.But some
of
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people
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the people
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will go to work straightly to make
salary
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early for their family or themselves,it is very risky but it is a good choice to create a good
life
in the
planned
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.They can make family early,prepare for their
life
,have more experience in the
future
,
not
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and not
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worry about the cash or dependent on their family.They can make a good
life
even better,it is
also
a premise for their children.
On the other hand
,if you go straightly to
University
education,you will have more opportunities to find more jobs which can help make lots of money in the planned,student after finishing
their
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high school graduate,
they
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usually have more
time
to prepare
their
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your
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University
studies to get a good start in their
future
and
then
they will go to
University
.If they spend
time
working before starting their
University
studies,they will not have a good start and very risky,most of company or factories need
people
who had graduate from
university
,they need it because they want
people
to have
knowledge
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to do hard work to boost their company or factory,it
look
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very difficult but the result is very pleasing for you.Most
of
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students will choose
this
way for their
future
,at
the
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first
time
it
very
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hard to do it but if you pass
this
challenge,you will be very
successfully
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in the
future
. In conclusion,the safest way for your
future
is
going
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straightly
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to
educational
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institution education,it a good choice for your
life
,it maybe wastes your
life
a little bit but the result is very pleasing.
Moreover
,when you study at
University
you will have more experience and knowledge for your job to make a lot of money to prepare your
life
and your family.
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