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The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a paricular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017

The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a paricular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017
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Total
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The total
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 sum of tourists visiting one of the Caribbean
island
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islands
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 from 2010 to 2017 has been illustrated by the line graphs.
Overall
, from 2010 to 2017 it can be seen that the total
number
 of
visitors
have
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has
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 gradually increased except for the
years
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year
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 2015, where the total
number
has
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remained constant and inclined from 2016
upto
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up to
 2017. The
visitors
 on
this
island
 have spent their
vecation
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vacation
vocation
 either on cruise ships or on the
island
.
Firstly
, we can see that the
number
 of
toursist
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tourists
tourist
 staying on the
island
 was constant from 2010 to 2011 and the numbers
have
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pickedup
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picked up
 from 2011 onwards
upto
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up to
 2013 reaching their highest
number
 of 1.5. For the next three
years
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,years
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 the
number
 of
visitors
for
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to
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 the
island
have
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has
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 remained the same and
have
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has
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 dropped from 2015 to 2016. A positive trend has been observed from 2016 to 2017 for the
island
visitors
 which has reached back to 1.5.
On the other hand
, cruise
ships
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ship
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stays
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 back in 2010 to 2015 have been less popular than the
island
accomodations
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accommodations
 as
depected
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depicted
detected
 by the graph.
However
, cruise ship stays have received more
number of
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toursit
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tourist
tourists
 from mid of 2015 onwards for the next two years.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words island, number, visitors with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graphs" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stays" was used 2 times.
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