Your English-speaking friend has asked for your help with a college project he/she is doing about celebrating New Year in different country. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter -say how important New Year is to people in your country -describe how New Year is celebrated in your country -explain what you like about New Year celebration in your country Begin your letter as follows:

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Dear Sam, It has been a
while
since we have talked and I hope you are doing well. I know in your
last
letter to me you
have
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asked about the New
Year
celebrations in my country
for
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which I am very excited to
tell
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. First of all, India
being
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the
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religious country , everything
include
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New
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the New
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Year
embarks
the
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beginning after seeking blessings from God. I remember you telling me about the
new
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year
eve's celebration in your nation on 31st December but in our country
mostly
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people like to spend their evening with their loved ones by watching
new
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year
programs on television.
Moreover
, on 1st January, after visiting
temples
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people like to either visit their relatives or spend time with their family members.
Furthermore
, there is a fair which happens in my city every
year
, I remember my father taking me to it since childhood. It is like our every
new
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year
tradition.
However
, the thing that I admire most about my celebrations is it helps me to stay connected with my family members. It is always
to
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fun to go out and visit relatives on these special
occassions
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occasions
as it helps me to stay in touch with my cousins. Well, I hope I answered all your queries. Just let me know if you need to know something else. And you better come to meet me soon. Best wishes, Simran
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coherence cohesion
Consider breaking the second paragraph into smaller paragraphs to make it easier for the reader to follow. This will also help to highlight each point more effectively.
task achievement
Pay attention to minor grammatical issues and proper usage of articles. For example, 'new year eve's' should be 'New Year's Eve' and 'temple' should be 'temples'.
task achievement
You've done a great job explaining the cultural and familial significance of New Year celebrations in your country.
coherence cohesion
The closing is friendly and maintains the personal tone, making the letter feel sincere and genuine.
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