The graph shows average Household expenditure in 2019 and 2020

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, the pie chart illustrates the budget of an average household with their spending on five different segments proportion-wise in the year 2019 and 2020. In 2019, common household owners contributed their 55% of income to food sources,

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spent less on healthcare and insurance at only 5%.

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, families in 2020 spent 20% of their expenditure on healthcare comparatively 15% more in 2019 and

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% decrease had seen on food, which makes 41% in 2020, respectively.

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, households in 2019 had a significant budget for education of 13% which drastically decreased to only 2% in 2020.

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, standard families in both of

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year 2019 and 2020 spent 20% of their annual income on facility of accommodation. In terms of the remaining budget was allocated to various products and services at 7% in 2019 and surprisingly high in

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segment at 18% in 2020.

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