In many parts of the world, children are given more freedom than in the past. Is this a positive or negative development?
Nowadays, teenagers in myriad areas have more freedom than their predecessors. From my perspective,
this
trend has both merits and demerits.
On the one hand, the allowance of freedom potentially makes a child gain to be brilliant and mature from a young age. Indeed, the parents who restrict or forbid their son’s activities, one of the characters in past generations, usually be strict to regulate
their child’s attitude. Ensure, children will be endured too much because of their parent's protection. Change preposition
in regulating
Furthermore
, their social skills will be succumbed
by the same age who have independence. Verb problem
affected
For instance
, children of the 1970s generation, whose parents inhibit all their behaviours in contact with society. Thus
, the ancestors are less independent than the current generations.
On the other hand
, exceeding allowing children freedom should be detrimental. So that they will lead to excessive liberty in matters of morality. If they aren’t abided by parent management, they would entangle illegal responsibilities. Specifically, that maybe is
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may be
such
as alcohol, etc. Or, to a lesser degree, the child may be spoiled from indulgence and develop damaging character traits such
as arrogance or irresponsibility.
In my opinion, flexibility is essential for young people to become independent individuals,but it should be within a threshold limit and that limit should be determined by guardians themselves.By way of conclusion, the flexibility offered to young people is in such
a way that it should not make them feel that they are under the control of their elders at the same time the elders should monitor them as well.Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.
task response
Ensure that the introduction clearly states the opinion and position on the given issue. Provide a clear conclusion that summarizes the main points and reiterates the opinion.
coherence and cohesion
Work on organizing the essay logically, with a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion. Use transition words to connect ideas and improve overall coherence and cohesion.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite