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The chart below shows the process of waste paper recycling.

The chart below shows the process of waste paper recycling.
The given picture illustrates the way to re-process the
paper
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 from the garbage.
Overall
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, there are six steps in the process of reusing
paper
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, commencing with the collection of waste material, and culminating in a papermaking machine where usable
paper
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 is made.
The first step is
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 when
paper
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 materials are collected from collection points
such
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 as public
paper
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 banks and businesses that generate plenty of used
paper
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.
This
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paper
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 is
then
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 categorized by hand and separated
according to
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 its grades, with any
paper
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that is
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 not suitable for recycling being eradicated.
Following
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this
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, the selected
paper
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 is transported to a
paper
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 mill where it continues to be treated. In the next stage, the
paper
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 is cleaned and pulped, and other objects
such
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 as staples are detached. After that, all remnants of ink and glue are removed from the
paper
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 at the de-inking stage.
Finally
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, having been processed in a
paper
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-making
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paper making
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paper-making
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 machine, the pulp is transformed into a new
paper
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 which is ready to be used.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "such".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words paper with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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