the two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010.
The two maps illustrate the specified
road
which has access to a city
hospital in two different years.
In the year 2007, there is just one entrance to the Hospital road
which they can pass the city
road
and then
turn to the northern. The road
has three bus stations in
each Change preposition
on
sides
. So, there would be Change to a singular noun
side
a
good accessibility for people. Remove the article
apply
Moreover
, there is a car
park in
the east side of the Hospital Change preposition
on
road
which is provided for both staffs
and Fix the agreement mistake
staff
Correct article usage
the publics
publics
. Fix the agreement mistake
public
While
,
the Remove the comma
apply
car
park has a door to a Ring road
which is making a
full access to the Remove the article
apply
city
hospital. On the other map, three years later there are a lot of differences in roads
design. They can go along the Change the noun form
road
city
road
then
turn left, at the roundabout there are two exits. One of them is a Correct word choice
and then
road
to the road
called Hospital road
and the one in the west is ended Capitalize word
Road
to
a big area for Change preposition
at
bus
stop. Add an article
the bus
a bus
Then
, they can connect to the Hospital road
. Moreover
, at
the right side of the Hospital Change preposition
on
road
is a staff car
parks
. Correct the article-noun agreement
park
In addition
, at the roundabout in second
Change the article
the second
square
they can exit by the first exit and continue Add a comma
,square
in
Change preposition
on
the
Ring Correct article usage
apply
road
to see another Capitalize word
Road
car
park which is for ordinary people.
Overall
, there have been a lot of changes in a
Remove the article
apply
road
access to a hospital in 2007 and in 2010.Submitted by javadsaady1992 on
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