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the two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010.

the two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010.
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The two maps illustrate the specified
road
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 which has access to a
city
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 hospital in two different years. In the year 2007, there is just one entrance to the Hospital
road
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 which they can pass the
city
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road
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 and
then
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 turn to the northern. The
road
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 has three bus stations
in
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on
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 each
sides
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side
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. So, there would be
a
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apply
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good accessibility for people.
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, there is a
car
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 park
in
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on
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 the east side of the Hospital
road
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 which is provided for both
staffs
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staff
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 and
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the publics
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publics
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public
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.
While
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,
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apply
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 the
car
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 park has a door to a Ring
road
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 which is making
a
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apply
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full access to the
city
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 hospital. On the other map, three years later there are a lot of differences in
roads
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road
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 design. They can go along the
city
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road
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then
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and then
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 turn left, at the roundabout there are two exits. One of them is a
road
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 to the
road
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 called Hospital
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road
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Road
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 and the one in the west is ended
to
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at
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 a big area for
bus
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the bus
a bus
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 stop.
Then
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, they can connect to the Hospital
road
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.
Moreover
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,
at
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on
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 the right side of the Hospital
road
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 is a staff
car
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parks
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park
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.
In addition
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, at the roundabout in
second
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the second
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square
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,square
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 they can exit by the first exit and continue
in
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on
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the
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apply
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Ring
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road
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Road
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 to see another
car
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 park which is for ordinary people.
Overall
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, there have been a lot of changes in
a
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apply
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road
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 access to a hospital in 2007 and in 2010.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "moreover".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words road, city, car with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • accessibility
  • dual carriageway
  • roundabout
  • traffic flow
  • multi-story car park
  • green spaces
  • pedestrian provisions
  • footpaths
  • traffic signals
  • construction phase
  • ambulances
  • carriageway expansion
  • traffic congestion
  • pedestrian crossings
  • urban planning
  • infrastructure development
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