‎ Some young people leave the countryside to live in cities or towns, leaving only ‎older people in the countryside. What are the problems of this issue? What can ‎be done to solve this problem?‎

With growing urbanization and civilization in towns and cities, many young
people
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and moving into towns and cities with the hope of better prospects for life and ease of living.
However
,
this
trend unfortunately leaves older
people
back in their homes on their own which has given rise to
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of problems . In
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essay , we are going to discuss the problems and potential mitigation for these issues. First of all, with
increase
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in age , there is a decrease in the mobility of
older
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generation which hinders their basic day-to-day activities like buying groceries and other essentials.
Moreover
, they are not tech
savy
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savvy
so they might not know how to buy
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online. To overcome
this
issue, middle-aged
people
in the vicinity can create volunteer groups and offer them services to help them.
Secondly
, if they fall sick and need hospitalization
then
they are unable to call in for medical help which can eventually be fatal if timely help is not provided.
This
issue can be mitigated by installing
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button in their homes and
whenver
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whenever
the emergency arises, they can press that button and within minutes necessary help would arrive at their doorstep and any mishap would be avoided.
Thirdly
,
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old age comes with
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own share of loneliness and no one to speak around ,
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by
organzing
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organising
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weekly meetups where aged
people
come around and meet
people
of their age and discuss
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problems. In
this
way, all the potential issues can be
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with the help of technology and support from fellow
people
in
vicinity
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • aging population
  • labor shortages
  • economic decline
  • cultural erosion
  • brain drain
  • social isolation
  • rural development
  • infrastructure decay
  • migration
  • healthcare
  • social services
  • local industries
  • agriculture
  • local businesses
  • cultural heritage
  • traditions
  • loneliness
  • mental health
  • investment
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