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Prison is the common way most Countries try to solve the problem of Crime However, a more effective solution is to provide the public a better education. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#prison #countries #crime #education
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In the contemporary era,
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crime
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 is prevailing at an alarm Pace across the globe. Manifold nations try to use different
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 of methods to
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authorities
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criminals
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behind the bar or they ought to use
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 to remove Criminal
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. I adamantly agree with the latter notion.
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prison in the upcoming paragraphs. The
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seduce
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 to educate the Children in school about the consequences. of
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 to know the
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 and try to tide with
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rule
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, some nations access the globe, try to educate at
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reduce of
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 to
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eliminate
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 will have to
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produce
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government
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due to
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verong
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wrong
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 but I believe Can educate the youth about the consequences of
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 the initial basis at primary school. Eventually that
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 assistance to decline wrong behaviors toward the Societies.
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