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the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.

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The bar chart illustrates the outcomes of a questionnaire which was about the consumption pattern of
coffee
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 and
tea
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 among the population of five different cities in Australia in the
last
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 month.
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, the majority of
people
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 drink
coffee
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 and
tea
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 in a café’.
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,
instant
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coffee
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 and fresh
coffee
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 were in the second and third positions in popularity among
people
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. Regarding the
coffee
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 or the
tea
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 which were used in a café’, Melbourn and Hobart had the most consumption among others with about 64% of city residents. Sydney’s inhabitants drink over 60% in a café’
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, Brisbane with about 55%, and Adelaide with less than 50% were the
last
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 consumers of
coffee
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 or
tea
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 in cafés. Regarding
instant
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 and fresh
coffee
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, it can be seen that Adelaide was the only city in which
people
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 used
instant
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coffee
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 more than going to a café’. 50% of its
people
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 used
instant
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coffee
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 and with a significant gap less than 35% consumed fresh
coffee
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.
People
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 in Hobart, Brisbane, Melbourne, and Sydney drink
instant
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coffee
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 in a range between 54% to 45% respectively.
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, Sydney was the first fresh
coffee
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 user, and Melbourne, Hobart, and Brisbane were in the
second,
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third,
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and Fifth places using fresh
coffee
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 respectively, in that period.
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