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Some people say that advertisinzg is extremely successful at persuading us to buy things. Other people think that advertising is so common that we no longer pay attention to it. discuss both these views and give your own opinion

#people #advertisinzg #attention
We all are buried under the abundance of advertising that we see every day. Some
people
 think that advertising has lost its effectiveness.
While
 other individuals believe that advertising still attracts the attention of an audience. I,
however
, subscribe to the second belief. On the one hand, being exposed to adverts are inevitable which is an intellectual trick that companies follow to create fake demand in folk and encourage them with eye-catching products.
For example
, youtube has shown approximately 8 ads every 30 minutes with a reputation to seduce
people
.
Also
, they usually convince
people
 in an attractive way.
For instance
, they usually do that with the most idealist situation that a person may have. Namely, a beautiful body or a wealthy house.
In addition
, authorities provide a sense of satisfaction and fulfilment in life and bring about desired outcomes by achieving a particular commodity regardless of their financial situation.
In contrast
, if they do not meet their unnecessary demands, they would lose their fancy lives and feel empty about themselves.
On the other hand
, there is ample evidence to suggest that it is irritating and intrusive to watch ads many times every day on a smartphone
such
 as Spotify, Instagram, and ticktack and interrupt them in the middle of their watching movie on TV or listening to a podcast. Take the example of some games on a phone and gamers are cut off and deter them from playing.
Thus
, it is the prominent reason to make advertisements unnoticeable and prove to be counterproductive. In conclusion, irrespective of some drawbacks of adverts, in my opinion,
people
 are lured by companies' traps.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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