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In some countries, online shopping is replacing shopping in stores. Do you think it is a positive or negative development?

#countries #stores #development
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Thanks to technical development, daily more and more
people
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 buy goods from the Internet
instead
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 of going to physical stores.
However
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, I believe that
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 trend can be both positive and negative. On the one hand, shopping online brings some benefits for
customers
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. First and foremost,
this
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 kind of purchase offers convenience to buyers.
Customers
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 can easily select any items from their comfortable homes, or workplaces and it is
also
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 not complicated to cancel transactions for a particular item if they chose the wrong
product
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 or wanted to change to another one.
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,
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 satisfaction shopping gives more
time
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 for
people
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 who can manage
time
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 for shopping and
time
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 for other life activities.
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, online buying helps
customers
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 the ability to compare styles and prices of
products
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. The selling companies manifest the arrangement of
products
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 online,
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 variety of models
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online will help
customers
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 multichoice after comparing prices and the features of
products
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.
For instance
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,
customers
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 from Vietnam in Asia can have a look at a
product
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 online in the American market with a distance far around half of the earth.
On the other hand
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, faulty
products
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 and delayed transportation are negative of shopping through the Internet. It cannot be denied that many websites show many attractive goods to draw attention from
people
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 and
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 sell fake
products
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. In
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 way, the
customers
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 hardly return those faulty
products
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.
As a result
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,
people
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 can be ruined the experience of shopping in general. Another negative aspect of internet buying is a delay in delivery. Unlike traditional marketplaces where buyers can receive the selected
products
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 at the same
time
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 they paid, online
customers
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 cannot.
Due to
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 the distance and policy shipping,
customers
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 can wait a period
time
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 longer than they are expecting. Especially, if they want to buy a
product
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 at a certain
time
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, it is hard to tell if
this
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product
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 will come in
time
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. In conclusion, though online shopping is increasing
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 the many benefits it offers for
customers
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 in modern life ,
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however
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 physical stores are still secure places for buyers to bring a good experience shopping atmosphere.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • unparalleled convenience
  • remote areas
  • wide range of products
  • broad selection
  • price comparison
  • customer satisfaction
  • value for money
  • impact on local businesses
  • economic diversity
  • job losses
  • environmental implications
  • packaging waste
  • carbon emissions
  • carbon footprint
  • data privacy
  • cybersecurity
  • personal data
  • tactile shopping experience
  • immediate gratification
  • physically examined
  • robust measures
  • consumer information
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