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10.B.Some people think restoration of the old building takes huge amount of the government expenditure. It would be more beneficial to use this money for the development of new roads and buildings. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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A place is well known for its old building or historical monuments and they are
the
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one the best source of income to make that place well known. I totally disagree with
this
 statement that
government
 should not renovate the old
buildings
 as it takes a lot of money
instead
 they should invest
this
 amount in new roads and
buildings
.
Firstly
, many tourists come to
a
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historic places, so that they can admire the beauty and architecture of that building, like in ancient times when
people
 used to build those
things
 in spite of the technology.
For example
, all around the world,
people
 come to visit and feel surprised to see the architecture of a building that
deny
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 all the laws of construction. They can learn more new
things
 if only
government
 will protect them at any cost if anything happened to them. On the second hand,
people
 want the
government
 to invest in new roads and
buildings
 or make better these
things
 but they are forgetting that, to modernize these
things
 the money authorised
people
 invest comes from the old
buildings
 as they aspect a large number of income because of travellers. For
an
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instance, suppose no one comes to visit the old structure
then
 the per capita of the state would plunge and rather than investing in new structures they can be in need of basic
things
. In conclusion, if anything happens to the old
buildings
government
 should take
an
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action to make it and after attaining that money from the sightseeing from the
people
, they should invest in new roads and building of that place. So that the infrastructure is
also
 good and
people
 can reach there in no time and stay as long as they want.
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