The maps below show an industrail area in the town of Norbiton, and planned future development of the site

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The maps demonstrate the Norbtion industrial area in its current form.

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, the

town

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of Norbiton is to be turned into a residential

town

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. The bridge is to connect the other side of the

river

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, facilities for the people of the

town

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are to be constructed. Presently, Norbiton is an industrial

town

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, filled with factories. It is located on the east of the

town

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and there is a roundabout that connects the south.

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, many factories are built beside the eastern road. To the north of the Norbiton industrial area, there is farmland which is opposite the

river

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the proposal, only the roundabout and

river

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will remain at the original site.

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, all the factories are destroyed to make way for several houses by road, a school in the east of the area, and a playground beside the

river

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. A shop and medical centre will be added as well.

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, a new bridge will be constructed over the brook leading to residential houses which are built on the farmland.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

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Task Achievement: 4.0

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3 paragraphs

172 words

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The maps below show an industrail area in the town of Norbiton, and planned future development of the site

Some teachers say students should be organised into groups to study. Others argue students should be made to study alone. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

In many countries, people have health problems because they chose to live an unhealthy lifestyle. What are the reasons and solutions?

Some countries achieve international sports by building specialised facilities to train top athletes, instead of providing sports facilities that everyone can use. Do you think this is positive or negative development? Discuss both views and give your opinion.

The top priority of businesses is making money, and they do not need to have social responsibilities. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

What do you think are the causes of this? What can be done to draw people's attention to art? The government's investment in arts, music and theatre is a waste of money. Governments should invest these funds in public services instead.