The maps below show an industrail area in the town of Norbiton, and planned future development of the site

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The maps demonstrate the Norbtion industrial area in its current form.

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, the

town

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of Norbiton is to be turned into a residential

town

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. The bridge is to connect the other side of the

river

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, facilities for the people of the

town

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are to be constructed. Presently, Norbiton is an industrial

town

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, filled with factories. It is located on the east of the

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and there is a roundabout that connects the south.

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, many factories are built beside the eastern road. To the north of the Norbiton industrial area, there is farmland which is opposite the

river

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the proposal, only the roundabout and

river

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will remain at the original site.

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, all the factories are destroyed to make way for several houses by road, a school in the east of the area, and a playground beside the

river

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. A shop and medical centre will be added as well.

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, a new bridge will be constructed over the brook leading to residential houses which are built on the farmland.

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The maps below show an industrail area in the town of Norbiton, and planned future development of the site

Band 9: in 1990 and 2010 to travel to and from school using different modes of transport. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Topic: More people today prefer to live alone in comparison to the past. Do you think it is a positive or a negative development . Give your opinion and relevant examples to support your views.

Some researchers believe that all children need to learn a musical instrument as part of their education. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Some people think that large, impressive buildings are important for a city. Others believe that the money should be spent on improving schools and hospitals. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.