The diagram shows how Olive Oil is manufactured. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below. You should write at least 150 words.

The diagram shows how Olive Oil is manufactured. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below. You should write at least 150 words.
The illustration demonstrates the
steps
and process of the manufacturing of olive oil.
Overall
, the production consists of 7
steps
with a combination of human-tasked
steps
and autonomous machined
steps
. The production is commenced when a worker picks
olives
from their farm trees. The
olives
are
then
cleansed with cold water by an automated machine. Once fully cleansed, the
olives
are
then
transferred to another station by a conveyor unit. The next station continuously grinds the
olives
in order to attain two products that are olive paste and olive stones. The two aforementioned products are
then
bagged into a duffel container with punctured holes for air to regularly circulate the products. After some time, the duffel bag undergoes a pressing procedure to flatten and increase its surface area. The latter once again is needed to separate its byproduct water. Ultimately, olive oil is fully separated and the final step is to pack them and ship them out to any destination looking to purchase the product.
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