You use the local swimming pool often and during one of your visits you have encountered a problem. Write a letter to the manager and say – What the problem was and when it happened – What the swimming pool staff have done about it – Suggest your own solution to the problem.

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Respected Sir, I am writing

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letter to express my concern in reference to the visit I had

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week and to put forward some of my suggestions that can be helpful. I must mention that I am a regular client and want

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place to be of the same high standards as before.

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, the pool was so dirty, there were people throwing wrappers and stuff, no consideration of cleanliness and the water was so smelly as if it

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not been drained and refilled for many days.

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, there were kids in the adults section,

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was very alarming.

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, the staff showed no concern, they were fine with whatever was happening. When asked them to arrange some cleaning and take the kids to their section, they did not bother.

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, I would like to add some suggestions here,

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the staff needs to get trained, special guidance is required.

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it is best to check the pool before opening it to the public, a deep cleaning of the area and daily water change is necessary.

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is not just for the club’s good name but

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it concerns the health of your customers. I hope to see some good changes taking place and thank you for having an open arm for improvements. Yours truly, Sera Smith

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task response

Ensure all points requested in the prompt are addressed clearly and thoroughly.

coherence cohesion

Organize ideas in a more cohesive manner, and link them together using appropriate transitions.

lexical resource

Use a wider range of vocabulary and expressions to convey ideas more effectively.

grammatical range

Pay attention to sentence structure and the use of complex grammar forms to enhance writing.

The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

Best regards,
Warm wishes,

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 8.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 8.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

8 paragraphs

220 words

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The Closing

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