You study at a college in the city centre. You use public transport to get to the college but the bus service you use has changed. Write a letter to the manager of the bus company. In the letter, -Say who you are and the details of service you use -Explain the problem with the bus service -Suggest what you think the manager should do

Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to inform you that I am unhappy with the current 246
bus
services
. My name is Sarah Smith who is a student at Victoria
college
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College
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. I have been using 246
bus
services
from Brighton to
city
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the city
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centre to go to school
weekdays
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on weekdays
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for almost 2 years.
Although
246
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the 246
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route used to have four
bus
services
per hour, it has been reduced to only two
services
last
month without any notice. When I phoned the customer service department, I was told that your company had to decide to minimise the number
due to
a
cost cutting
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. I believe that
this
inconvenient situation has been affecting not only me but
also
other passengers who are relying on the 246
bus
services
. I could not even get on the
bus
at 7:15am from Brighton
last
Friday as it was already packed.
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other people and I had to wait for the next
bus
in the extremely cold weather and it was a really frustrating experience. I would
therefore
like to request to have more
services
for passengers' safety and comfort like it used to be. If you could proceed
my
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request as soon as possible, I would be so grateful. Thank you so much for your consideration and I look forward to hearing from you soon. Yours faithfully, Sarah Smith
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