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Some people think that studying at university or college is the best route to a successful career, while others believe that it is better to get a job straight after graduating from high school. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#people #university #college #route #career #job #school
It is a debatable issue, whether working before beginning their
university
 studies is helpful for
students
 or not. So I believe that
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 graduates should learn more practical knowledge because it helps
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 have communication skills and be more confident in their imminent life. The first idea
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students
 to gain work experience, which will ultimately lead to a good position in a company after a period of
time
 when they have more good qualifications.
Furthermore
, the
students
 that spend
time
 working, spend
time
 gain experience from working will find employment without any hardship. So
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working experiences help
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the student
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 have a good life after graduation, and the unemployment rate will be lower than the rest of the
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students
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 that didn’t spend
time
 working before beginning their
university
 studies.
On the other hand
, some people think that
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 shouldn’t
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 before
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university
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. People believe that their children would spend more
time
 on their
university
 education and the
students
 mustn’t work to gain
experiences
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. They think if their child working, it will affect
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the academic achievement of their children. When the
students
 graduate, the employment rate is 50/50, the
student
 can get a job if they have enough confidence, qualifications and communication skills. And if
students
 don’t have those skills, the unemployment
ratios
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 will be higher. In short,
that is
 my true
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, a lot of qualifications without
real life
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 experience
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 completely worthless.
However
, it is beneficial to spend a significant amount of
time
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 something like that to graduate school.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Academic qualifications
  • Specialized skills
  • In-depth knowledge
  • Personal growth
  • Social development
  • Practical experience
  • Financial independence
  • Career progression
  • Professional networking
  • Education
  • Work experience
  • Successful career
  • Personal interests
  • Career goals
  • Decision-making process
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