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Your friend has a travel company and would like you to come and work with him. Write a letter replying to your friends offer. In your letter: - explain what you know about your friends company choose whether you accept or decline the offer • give reasons for your choice

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Dear Jun, How are you? I hope you’re doing well. I’m writing to respond to your job offer. Honestly, I would be grateful to be able to work in your
company
. Let me tell you about the situation.
Firstly
, I’ve researched your travel
company
 profile through the website and many people give positive reviews about your pleasant services.
Additionally
, the
company
 has been selling flight tickets for 10 years, not merely tickets but
also
 hotels, cruises and tours. As you know, currently I am working as an accountant and my working contract is approaching next month. Unfortunately, I don’t enjoy
this
 job because it’s too monotonous,
which
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and
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 I have to do the same task every day.
Therefore
, I decided to quit my job, and gladly accept your offer to work in your esteemed
company
.
Furthermore
, I have a keen interest in
traveling
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travelling
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 and used to work as a tour guide, so I have a lot of experience and knowledge about other countries.
Additionally
, I
also
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 accustomed to planning itineraries and have good communication. Thank you for your offering, and looking forward to your reply. Warm regards, Lim
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Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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