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Some people believe thatstudying at university or college is the best route to a succesfull carrer,while other believe that is better to get a job strainght after graduating from high school.Discuss both view and give your opinion

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Nowadays, it is easy to see the important role of the university and
this
 has a big effect to the social. Many ideas show that going to
academy
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 or college is the best way to a successful carrier,
while
 some argue that getting straight work after graduating from high school is superior. In the essay below I will show both views two opinions.
Firstly
, with go to university and college have plenty of advantages in our knowledge, we know that studying gives us a numerous information about our field and make us more opportunity to promote our role
of
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 our work.
Moreover
, when we study in a good environment so
that
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can give us more time to engage ourselves
,
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 and enjoy
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 teenage time more before enter in our
career
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. On the one ,hand the job we get depends on our degree, it shows how far our potential can reach and the exact of our skills.
Therefore
, going to
educational
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 institution or college can get great advantages with the conditions that we have a plan to grow and improve our minds. Turning to the contrast, getting an early job can give us the soon wage and experience.
As a
result
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 when we enter life earlier than each other at the same age, we will face many problems and if we try to solve that, with equals bring us a lesson and we can undergo many different circumstances.
Furthermore
, we will get a wage and can start an independent life, we can buy anything we want with the money we make and can give it to our parents as a repayment to them. In conclusion, each point of view has clear and reasonable ideas.It totally depends on your decision and how you do that. Success will belong to a worthy person like a reward.
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