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The plans below show. Public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

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The maps of grange
park
 illustrate the detail of the
park
 that was opened for the first time in 1920 and has developed every part of position
such
 as the disappearance of the stage for musicians or water spring
,
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 and increasing rose
garden
.
Therefore
,recently the
park
 has changed a lot to better than before. Look at the detail deeply,There
are
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is
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 2 entrance which is the same as in 1920.
On the
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The
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 top gate is on the
side
 of Arnoldo
avenue
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Avenue
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 street and another one is on the
side
 of Eldon Street,after walking through the entryway will see a regular fountain in the middle of the
garden
 that has changed to a large rose flower
garden
.
Also
,The Seats around the
park
 have been moved to surround the rose
garden
.
Moreover
,on the east
side
 of the plans,the pond for water plants and glasshouse is replaced with a children’s play area and water feature,and next to
children’s
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the children’s
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 playground is a cafe
instead
 old rose
garden
.
Furthermore
,there is an introduction of an amphitheatre for concerts to the west
side
 of the plan which extends to the area where the stage for musicians used to be.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • recreational facilities
  • landscaping
  • naturalistic
  • amenities
  • formal gardens
  • ergonomic
  • symmetric designs
  • inclusive
  • accessible
  • accommodations
  • native plant species
  • societal changes
  • visitor services
  • community events
  • evolution
  • modern playgrounds
  • wildflower meadows
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