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Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others belive that some imformation is too important or too valuable to be shared freely.

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Some individuals think that it is beneficial to share
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scientific and academic facts with general
people
,
while
 others believe that some sorts of
information
 are too precious to be disclosed easily and freely.
Although
 sharing
information
 in some fields can be fruitful, disclosing some valuable facts without any charge might be detrimental
,
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 because some persons and countries might abuse these worthy facts, and endanger both global peace
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 and personages’ lives. On one hand, some
people
 hold the idea that sharing academic
data
 without any charge
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 would bring about positive impacts. Through
this
 process,
people
 would enrich their knowledge, and prevent negative consequences that they might face in some specific situations. To exemplify, during
COVID-19
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 pandemic,
masses
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 could gain valuable
information
 through verified resources, like WHO, and by being aware of new discoveries about
this
 illness, a vast majority of them could prevent COVID’s fatal consequences.
On the other hand
, I opine that
this
 limitless
data
 disclosure
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 might lead to harmful consequences. Primarily, there are some sensitive fields
such
 as physics or some fields of engineering, which are related to national security, and a nation’s policy.
By
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 easy access of political rivals, or unprofessional
researches
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 to these
data
, the safety and security of millions of
people
 would be threatened, because they would utilize
these
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information
 in
wrong
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 way and for
their
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violent purposes,
hence
 there would lead to worldwide a catastrophe. To illustrate, some educational institutions in the United States, are now conducting secret experiments on special weapons. If they manifest their discoveries easily to
general
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people
, their political rivals,
such
 as Russia or North Korea, would use these
data
 to
threat
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world’s
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 peace, to just achieve their political goals against their components. In conclusion, though some types of scientific
information
,
such
 as medical ones are sharable and can help
people
 in positive ways, I think that disclosing some sorts of classified
data
 freely
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 would be a
mean
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 of abuse for some ignorant countries and unprofessional
researches
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researchers
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.
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