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In certain countries, unemployment is so high that some have suggested children should stop their education after primary school to learn skills necessary to join the workforce. Do you agree or disagree?

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With the growing unemployment rate, many countries think children should stop receiving
education
 after primary school to join the workforce after training in necessary
skills
. I strongly disagree with
this
idea
due to
 various reasons. The most significant reason why I do not support the
idea
 is that I completely fail to see its effectiveness. If
this
idea
 were to be implemented immediately, society within a few years should expect an increase in the number of teenagers claiming that they are suitable to work. In
this
 hypothetical situation, the older generations are still struggling to find jobs
due to
 global unemployment.
As a result
, the competition for jobs will even be harsher for both generations.
This
 solution is not effective as
this
 would only generate more labour without job listings to accommodate them. Another reason why I think
this
idea
 is ill-advised is I believe that
education
 beyond primary school is essential. Primary schools only teach
students
 basic math and little language
skills
.
Moreover
, the majority of
students
this
 age have low self-discipline.
This
 means that to prepare them for the workforce, they will need extensive
education
 to acquire both in-depth knowledge and soft
skills
. The current
education
 system solves
this
 problem by providing
students
 with academic knowledge and various opportunities to practice these
skills
. Communication
skills
 and self-discipline are
also
 trained through group assignments and the pressure to perform well. All in all,
this
 new solution does not do anything that the current system cannot. In conclusion, I do not support the
idea
 because it is both ineffective and unoriginal. Unemployment rates have to be solved by other means, rather than proposing that
students
 quit formal
education
 at
such
 a young age.
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