Parents should encourage their children to spend less time on studying and more time on physical activities. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
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parents
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incentivising
children
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time
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engaging
activities
can enhance their health Use synonyms
as well as
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performance
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To begin
with, there are several reasons why I believe Linking Words
parents
should encourage their Use synonyms
children
to spend less Use synonyms
time
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on
studying and more Change preposition
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time
on physical Use synonyms
activities
. The primary reason for my Use synonyms
believe
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that encourage
encourage
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to encourage
encouraging
children
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time
doing physical Use synonyms
activities
have a positive impact on Use synonyms
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children
health. Change noun form
children's
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is because more physical Linking Words
activities
mean more burn out Use synonyms
the
fat Correct article usage
apply
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children
body , which Change noun form
children's
mean
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means
children
will mitigate. Use synonyms
Therefore
, Linking Words
children
will become less vulnerable to get serious diseases namely, cancer, heart attack, and brain stroke.
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academic
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the academic
performance
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children
is another advantage of encouraging Use synonyms
children
to more participate in playing sports. The is is because Use synonyms
more
playing sports namely,swimming, tennis, and running can help Correct quantifier usage
apply
children
alleviate Use synonyms
strees
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stress
streets
trees
Consequently
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less
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fewer
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stress
children
mean their Use synonyms
perforamnce
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performance
the
studying will improve. Correct article usage
apply
Moreover
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parents
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children
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doing
more Change the verb form
do
exercises
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exercise
this
can make their Linking Words
children
more social. Use synonyms
For example
, engaging Linking Words
children
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on
Change preposition
in
footballs
can help them to build confidence and make Fix the agreement mistake
football
a new relationships
with others. Correct the article-noun agreement
new relationships
a new relationship
As a result
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children
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this
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improve
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improving
performance
.
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To sum up
, I completely think Linking Words
parents
should motivate their Use synonyms
children
to spend less Use synonyms
time
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on
studying and more Change preposition
apply
time
on physical Use synonyms
activities
because more Use synonyms
time
for Use synonyms
exercises
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exercise
have
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has
positive
impact on Add an article
a positive
Use synonyms
children
health Change noun form
children's
as well as
their academic Linking Words
performance
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