Parents should encourage their children to spend less time on studying and more time on physical activities. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Is it said
parents
should motivate their offspring to spend less time
on
studying and more Change preposition
apply
time
on
playing sportsChange preposition
apply
.
I totally agree with Change the punctuation
?
this
statement because incentivize
Wrong verb form
incentivising
children
to spend more time
enganing
in physical Correct your spelling
engaging
activities
can enhance their health as well as
academic performance
.
To begin
with, there are several reasons why I believe parents
should encourage their children
to spend less time
on
studying and more Change preposition
apply
time
on physical activities
. The primary reason for my believe
is Replace the word
belief
Correct word choice
that encourage
encourage
Change the verb form
to encourage
encouraging
children
to spend more time
doing physical activities
have a positive impact on children
health. Change noun form
children's
This
is because more physical activities
mean more burn out the
fat Correct article usage
apply
for
Change preposition
in
children
body , which Change noun form
children's
mean
the percentage of obesity among Correct subject-verb agreement
means
children
will mitigate. Therefore
, children
will become less vulnerable to get serious diseases namely, cancer, heart attack, and brain stroke.
Boosts
Wrong verb form
Boosting
academic
Add an article
the academic
performance
of children
is another advantage of encouraging children
to more participate in playing sports. The is is because more
playing sports namely,swimming, tennis, and running can help Correct quantifier usage
apply
children
alleviate strees
. Correct your spelling
stress
streets
trees
Consequently
, less
Change the quantifier
fewer
strees
among Correct your spelling
stress
children
mean their perforamnce
in Correct your spelling
performance
the
studying will improve. Correct article usage
apply
Moreover
, if the parents
encourage their children
to doing
more Change the verb form
do
exercises
Fix the agreement mistake
exercise
this
can make their children
more social. For example
, engaging children
on
Change preposition
in
footballs
can help them to build confidence and make Fix the agreement mistake
football
a new relationships
with others. Correct the article-noun agreement
new relationships
a new relationship
As a result
, if the children
become more confident this
can contribute to improve
their academic Change the verb form
improving
performance
.
To sum up
, I completely think parents
should motivate their children
to spend less time
on
studying and more Change preposition
apply
time
on physical activities
because more time
for exercises
Fix the agreement mistake
exercise
have
Correct subject-verb agreement
has
positive
impact on Add an article
a positive
children
health Change noun form
children's
as well as
their academic performance
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