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The diagram below shows how instant noodles are manufactured. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows how instant noodles are manufactured. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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This
 diagram depicts the
manufactured
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 of instant
noodles
. It is clear From the graph that the manufacturing Process
take
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 8 Steps before
go
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going
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 to the supermarkets.
According to
 What is shown, the steps of Formation take three over Four of
manfacturing
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manufacturing
,
strating
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starting
 with a truck connected
with
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Lary
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a Lary
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bottel
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bottle
 of silos to
Mixer
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the Mixer
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 Flour will sids With add Water and oil until it
homogenize
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 together, the
thrid
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third
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 and four
stage
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 are responsible for the Formation of the
the
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external shape of
noodles
 in tow types of rollers
at the end
 of Frist Phase rool the
noodles
 in
circle
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 shape. The Second Phase
ls
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is
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, cooking the
noodels
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noodles
 in
oiland
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oil and
 drying
it
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them
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 well.
Then
,
but
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put
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 it in white cups with some vegetables and hot spices. After that, the logo of the
campiny
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company
camping
 stick
it
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apply
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in
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on
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 the front of
cups
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the cups
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.
To sum up
, we could say that the formation of
noodles
need
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 a huge of effort
comparied
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compared
 with
Packing
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the Packing
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 and exporting process.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words noodles with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Manufacturing process
  • Noodle dough
  • Steaming
  • Cutting
  • Dough sheeting
  • Molding
  • Air-drying
  • Frying
  • Seasoning
  • Quality control
  • Packaging
  • Shelf life
  • Flavoring agents
  • Texture
  • Instant meal
  • Convenience food
  • Production line
  • Consumer
  • Ingredient mixing
  • Safety standards
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