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The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world.

The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world.
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 illustrate the proportion of
water
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 utilized for several different aims in six zones of the world.
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, it is clear all the main
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useage
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usage
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 all areas for agriculture except
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North America and Europe was for
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,
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use
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domestic
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purpose
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 was the lowest percentage for all given areas. Looking at the graph in more detail, regarding farming, Central Asia and Africa was the highest proportion of
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 for agriculture at 88 and 84 %, respectively.
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North America and Europe was the
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 proportion at 39 and 32%. In terms of industrial,
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Europe had the highest percentage of
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 for industrial
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 at 35%,
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 Central Asia was the lowest at 5%. When it comes to domestic
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 North America was the highest area
use
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water
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 for domestic
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 at 19%. In comparison, Central and South
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East
 Asia was the lowest and the same percentage at 7%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, use, purpose with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumption
  • irrigation
  • domestic
  • industrial
  • regional disparity
  • economic structure
  • sustainable management
  • water-scarce
  • population density
  • urbanization
  • data trends
  • resource allocation
  • percentage distribution
  • extremes
  • variations
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