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The diagram below shows the number of landline telephones per 1000 people in different countries over a five-year period.

The diagram below shows the number of landline telephones per 1000 people in different countries over a five-year period.
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The bar chart gives information about the number of
landline
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 telephones per 1000
people
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 in different countries over a five-
year
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 period.
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, Singapore is the highest between 2000 and 2004, and Myanmar, Lao PDR, Cambodia, and Indonesia were in the group which is the lowest number of
landline
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 telephone ownership . In the bar chart Trends in
landline
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 line telephone ownership Singapore have the highest number of
landline
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 telephones between 2000 and 2002 around 500 per 1000
people
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, In the
year
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 2004 Singapore decreased by around 450 per 1000
people
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. Thailand and VietNam are in progress, but Thailand strongly decreased in the
year
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 2004. Brunei Darussalam is about 250 between 2000 and 2002
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 and decreased in the
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 2004. Philipines
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 decreased in the
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 2004 to around 100 per 1000
people
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words landline, people, year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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