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Sending criminals to jail is not an effective method of dealing with them. Education and job training should be used instead, to what extent do agree r disagree

#criminals #jail #method #education #job #r
Now a days
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crime
 rates are increasing exponentially and for years these are being dealt with
imprisonment
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through imprisonment
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. It's debated
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whether
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 sending every individual to jail is an effective way to deal with them, or
education
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whether education
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 and
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employment
employement
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employment
 opportunities should be increased
instead
 to reduce the
crime
 rates I will be discussing both
view
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 and
conclusion
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a conclusion
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 will be drawn
accordingly
. I believe that ways of dealing
depends
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 largely on the nature and severity of
crime
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the crime
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 under investigation. Criminal mindset
also
have
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 a significant role to play in
this
 regard.
For example
, if a person is a psychopath or a serial killer, you simply can't do justice by getting them employed r educated. They might need psychological counseling but imprisonment would be the best solution to deal with them.
However
 in some cases, if someone has lost his job and he robbed a grocery store in order to feed his poor children,
then
 you can't do justice by confining them. Rather, finding a suitable job for him
,
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 could save his family from
an
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everlasting misery. In order
to conclude
, modes of
crime
depends
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 largely upon the nature and the circumstances under which they are performed
,
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and
therefore
 should be dealt
accordingly
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with accordingly
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