You are a current student of Loren Brusque University, studying Business Administration. You want to apply for the post of Quality Assurance Manager you have recently seen on the university's notice board. Write a letter to Mr. Walker, and - Give your reason for writing - Tell about your education - Describe your work experience and explain why you would be suitable for the job.

Dear
Mr.
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Walker, Allow me to introduce myself, my name is Alan from Loren Brusque University and I am majoring in
Business
Administration. I am writing
this
letter regarding with you are seeking for
quality
assurance
manager. I have interested to apply
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job
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in
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the university's notice board. Allow me to explain the reasons.
Firstly
, I am
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year student
that
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majoring
business
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in business
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administrasion
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administration
, and
also
this
major have
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with the
job
requirement.
Secondly
, The
job
are need
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people who have
experienced
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in
assurance
with
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experience
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.
Lastly
,
also
have good managerial in the trainee in the past
job
. In
Business
Administration, I learned how to manage the
business
from head to toe, like cash flow, searching
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supplier, checking the
quality
of the item, and
also
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about
business
law.
In addition
, with
this
educational
background
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I thought I am suitable
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the
job
criteria. I
also
have
experienced
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in
Quality
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Assurance
possition
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position
in my
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year of study. In that time, I
had
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worked in
online
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shop as
quality
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assurance
staff from June 2021 to August 2022. In
this
company, My
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had been improved in technical
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in computing, and I had been learned in
quality
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role. I would like to apply for the
vacanty
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vacancy
you post as
quality
assurance
manager. With my background and experience, I kindly ask your assistance to consider me as a potential candidate. Yours faithfully, Alan
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