You are a current student of Loren Brusque University, studying Business Administration. You want to apply for the post of Quality Assurance Manager you have recently seen on the university's notice board. Write a letter to Mr. Walker, and - Give your reason for writing - Tell about your education - Describe your work experience and explain why you would be suitable for the job.

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Dear
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Walker, Allow me to introduce myself, my name is Alan from Loren Brusque University and I am majoring in
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Administration. I am writing
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letter regarding with you are seeking for
quality
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assurance
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manager. I have interested to apply
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job
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that you post
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the university's notice board. Allow me to explain the reasons.
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, I am
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year student
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apply
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majoring
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business
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in business
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administrasion
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administration
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this
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major have
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with the
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requirement.
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are need
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people who have
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in
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with
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experience
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.
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,
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have good managerial in the trainee in the past
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. In
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Administration, I learned how to manage the
business
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from head to toe, like cash flow, searching
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supplier, checking the
quality
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of the item, and
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leaned
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about
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law.
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educational
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I thought I am suitable
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the
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criteria. I
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have
experienced
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in
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Quality
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a Quality
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Assurance
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possition
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in my
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year of study. In that time, I
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worked in
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shop as
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quality
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a quality
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assurance
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staff from June 2021 to August 2022. In
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company, My
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had been improved in technical
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in computing, and I had been learned in
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quality
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role. I would like to apply for the
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vacancy
you post as
quality
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assurance
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manager. With my background and experience, I kindly ask your assistance to consider me as a potential candidate. Yours faithfully, Alan
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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