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The chart above shows information about various professions in the U.K. and their salaries. The table shows the average working hours per week for each profession Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

The chart above shows information about various professions in the U.K. and their salaries. The table shows the average working hours per week for each profession Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.
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The given block graph makes a comparison between initial and incremental remuneration for four varied professions,
whereas
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, the table chart describes the weekly number of
hours
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 for each profession
that is
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 Police, Nurse, Firefighter and Underground Driver. The data is calibrated in numbers.
Overall
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,
Underground
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the Underground
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 driver earns the highest
while
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 working for
least
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the least
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hours
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 among all. To take a deep look at the bar graph, it can be clearly seen that the Police officers got
double
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a double
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 increment in the
three
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 years as compared to the other
three
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 occupations
that
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is
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are
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salary
Correct article usage
a salary
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 hike of 2000 pounds.
Whereas
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, the remaining
three
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 job spheres earned a hike of 1000 pounds during the
three
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 year time period.
Also
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, nursing remained the lowest
payed
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paid
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 occupation earning just 18000 pounds.
Furthermore
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, Fire workers worked for the maximum
hours
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 in a week earning the second highest pay. Underground drivers worked for the least
hours
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among
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of
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 all. Nurses and Police professionals worked for 38 and 40
hours
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 respectively in a week.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "that is, whereas".
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words hours, three with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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