Studies shows that many criminals do not receive enough education, for this reason, people believe that the best ways to reduce crime is to educate them so they can find a job after being released. Do you agree or disagree.

Many
crime
happens in the country .
People
who ever had
crime
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crimes
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most of them are uneducated .They should
knows
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that whatever
crime
they do is going wrong.If they are educated he or she will know the things done was going wrong .We can reduce
crime
by
educate
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educating
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in my
openion
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opinion
We have many
option
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options
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and
benifits
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benefits
in
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of
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studies.Many
country
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countries
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is
in
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at
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high
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a high
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level
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levels
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by
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of
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educate
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education
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if
their
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there
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wil
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will
be
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no
education
thye
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they
have no ideas.Books
gives
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give
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knowledge.If
their
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there
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will be no
education
people
have no idea
so
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what
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thay
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they
are doing
such
as
crime
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crimes
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.
Education
is needed in
everythings
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everything
and everywhere.Most
of
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people
had realised that they had no
eduation
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education
.
People
working in a
high level
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job or big salary
they
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apply
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have
education
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an education
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so they prefer that .
Criminal
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had joined
education
then
they can easily go in
truth
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the truth
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way.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
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  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

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  • In general

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